Revised Sam paragraph:
Sam needed some new boots and a shoe shine kit, so she got in her car and drove to the mall. After getting the things that she needed, she went the food court to get a burrito with onions and peppers on it. Then after eating, she saw a cute boy at the pretzel stand. As the boy looked at Sam she blushed. Then he walked over to her, so Sam said "Hi". The boy just wrinkled his nose, confused, Sam says" Hi" again, he gags and walks away. Sam shocked realizes she has bad breath, and she runs to the bathroom to cry. Then she puts on her new boots and shines them. Confidently Sam walks out of the bathroom, finds the boy and tells him "you need some manners", as she kicks him, with her new boots on. He falls to the ground, as Sam walks away and out of the mall.
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